Homestuck - Liar

Alright lets do some critique here B)

Alright so I'm gonna start off with saying that I love the shading on Dave's nose in the second frame. Very nice touch. I also must say you did the blood very well especially around his neck.

Now something you could improve on,
this might be about preferences but I feel Bro looks a lot younger then he is. Here he looks around the same age as Dave is. The only thing I could think of is giving him a thicker chin, neck and jaw line, but it might go against your style. Try experimenting and find a way that works for you.

Also Dave kinda lost his arms there for a moment.

I also feel that Dave's pose in the last frame is very...odd? I'm not sure what rubs me the wrong way with his shoulders so I cannot help you with that but the fact that he is looking away from Bro instead of right at him is probably not what you were after. Here he is standing in front of him so he would most likely have his face to the side.
Idk how to explain it because I have forgotten words sorry.

Other things that I do like is their eyes and the red around them. I also really like how empty and dead like Bro seem, especially in the last frame.

The lineup of the story also works rather well in my opinion. A bit confusing but probably because I'm too far back in the comic to know all the details. The feeling is coming through though and its a rather interesting idea you are playing on.

Well done bro

Well done.